The idea here is basically: rain, boredom, charades.
The thick white rain is seriously coming down (or maybe there are giant white comets).
The guys have little room under their tarp. sitting and waiting for the rain to stop.
One guy decides to entertain the other with some pantomiming.
Playing charades was one of the first things I thought of when I started down this road of “two guys in a wasteland, who can’t talk due to thier thick radiation safety suits”. How do you show their relationship? well, charades obviously!
eh. ?
Story wise, i think comic is a mess. I was discussing this with good friend Jonason Ho last ngiht, and realized the problem with these strips is how I’m telling the audience what’s up. I’m not letting them fill in a blank, so they can derive satisfaction (like a minor puzzle was solved). Also, I seem to be alternating between too little changing, and too much changing, between the panels. this is probably something that will just have to come in time. At least I’m thinking more about it, now.
When did i start doing extreme closeup in first panel, followed by two similar shots? Didn’t i do that in the family story line? Aren’t I mixing styles? AAAAHHRRGGGHH! these are things that distract me. Which no one else is likely noticing or thinking about.
I should probably just go back and change the final panel to be more of a distant/wide shot. Right now, it kind of imples the one armed dude must be sitting back in the rain (since we jsut showed that they can both barely fit).
eh. hmm. Plus I can no longer stomach the week “hand and foot” hints at the bottom of this frame. The idea was to answer the question “where is the other dude?” But. kinda looks retarded. hmmf. !
… Should probabyl skip charades all together. Just show them huddled under the little trash (bag), from a great distance. Emphasize their loneliness and solitude. Maybe show some rain drops again, to echo the first frame. This would be much more in line with the style so far. And would better setup the next strip…
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